'Fundamentally Altered', 2/5 for stagesoflove R2 - Arousal, #2 Excitement

[darkhavens]

Author: darkhavens
Title: Fundamentally Altered, 2/5
Pairing: Sam Winchester/Dean Winchester
Fandom: Supernatural
Rating: NC-17 overall
Words: 255
Feedback/Concrit: darkhavens @ slashverse.com
Disclaimer: Not mine, never will be. No harm, no foul, no money made.
Warnings/Squicks: Wincest.
Summary: Repeated near-death experience would affect us all.
Notes: Written for stagesoflove 2006, Round 2, 'Five Stages of Sexual Arousal'.
Also posted here.
#1 - Desire.



You're not quite sure what you expect - a roundhouse blow to the jaw, maybe a look of abject nausea and revulsion as he spits out bitter words that slice your soul like dull knives. You're expecting anything, everything, but his tongue in your mouth, his hands in your hair, holding on, twisting, opening you up and taking everything you've swallowed down and hid.

The solid press of his thigh against your groin, the heavy heat of your cock against his hipbone - it's like a match to an oily rag. Conflagration. Inferno. A flash fire, tweaking every nerve you never knew you had.

You don't even know you're moving till your back slams up against an unforgiving surface. Wall? Tree? Floor? You're too far gone to tell. There'll be bruises in the morning, red blue purple smears of colour that you'll wear with silent pride and quiet awe. But the morning seems an age away.

The here and now is filled with him - over you, around you, in you, on you, he's the air you breathe. He's hands on flesh, he's lips and teeth and tongue and cock. Sharp edges grinding hard against your own.

You've never felt this alive before, this full, this heavy, this ready to do or die, to fly or fail. It's exhilarating.


It's heaven and hell in one testosterone-filled time bomb. The countdown started when your lips hit his, but you don't know what time you've got before it blows sky high.

The fear makes you even harder.



Part Three

Comments

[imagination55.livejournal.com]

Poetic genius, man. Nuff said.
Loved this just as much as the 1st part.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

Sometimes the poetic thing takes me by surprise. I sit down to write and can almost feel the pulse of the piece before I've even typed a word of it. I'm so glad it works because I honestly don't think I could turn the damn thing off it I tried. *g*

[tabaqui]

Oooh, man.
Yeah.
Bruises.
:)
*shiver*

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

we do seem to have a mutual thing for bruises, don't we? *g*

[mf_luder_xf]

You're a god.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Hee! Thank you. :D

*poses at the altar*

[belleimani.livejournal.com]

You are so descriptive and sexy with you writing! Love it.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

I think this is one of the first (if not the first) piece I've written in second person POV and it feels so much more involved and immediate than my usual third person externa; view. I'm just so very glad it works! *g*

[belleimani.livejournal.com]

It does work. I'm so surprised this is your 1st First person pov. It's very well written!

[emella.livejournal.com]

Dear lord this is sexy. Love the hot heat and feel of it. Great descriptions and character p.o.vness. :P Great job babe! :)

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

I just said that I think this is my first real attempt at 2nd person POV and I'm so very happy to see that it's working. :D

[lady-shain.livejournal.com]

There'll be bruises in the morning, red blue purple smears of colour that you'll wear with silent pride and quiet awe.

Wow. That line, there is just perfect.

I can't recall reading anyone who's able to pack so much punch into something that short.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

I have a special love of bruises (it's one of my many kinks) and I think these boys probably grew up comparing bruises and trading tall tales about how they got them, so earning them in this new way would be significant. :D

[quietdiscerning.livejournal.com]

Mmm. Bruises. Yes. Soso perfectly stated.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

Mmm. Bruises. Yes.

My feelings in a nutshell. *g*

[jellicle.livejournal.com]

You brought poetry and made me feel more. Thank you.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I do love to see people 'getting' the poetry of it.

[literati.livejournal.com]

ohmyguh!

like you said, this could be anyone and I choose to view it that way.

HOTNESS!

♥

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Hush! I know who you think it is - you have a one-track mind. :P

Thankee, sweetie. :D

[darkhecatemoon.livejournal.com]

Hmm. I find it interesting that I automatically assumed it was Sam's POV and then realized that there's really no indication either way.

Anyway, very lovely.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

I suddenly realised that there was no indication of who they even were, right up until the final snippet of part 3 when they finally spoke each other's name. Up to that point it was almost anonymous. The POV in my head started out as Dean, but I have had moments when I wondered if it was Sam. *g*

[alistra.livejournal.com]

Now I know why your commenty thing says "Worship Me". Oh my.

That was... intense. Thank you for sharing!

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

LOL! Thank you. Intnese - I like that! :D

[tyrical.livejournal.com]

Whoa! This is some powerful stuff you can feel the need and the want and the heat. You are truly talented in this wordsmith thing, there's always and element of poetry, the visuals always take me to the seen and I am always moved by more than just the sexiness of it all.

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

Ah, another person who gets the poetry. *is happy* It sneaks up on me sometimes and then i wonder if I'm going crazy and if it works. Validation is always embraced. :D

[a-phoenixdragon.livejournal.com]

Ooo...Myyy...Guuuuhhhh...

Hot..Heavy...Hot...

Visuals...burned into...brain...

*Whimper...* I love you...

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

I have the same visuals seared into my cortex too. isn't it grand? *g* *smooch*

[kitty-poker1.livejournal.com]

You know, I just assumed the pov was Sammy's. Maybe because I think of Dean as being dominant. Whatever, the writing is pure poetry. It just seems to have fallen from your fingertips so naturally and fluently. Beautiful. *hugs*

[darkhavens.livejournal.com]

Thank you, darlin'!

Dean is dominant, but he's easily bruised too. *g* I definitely wrote this from inside Dean's head but several people have said they were reading it as Sam. :D