'The Safe Word', 500 words for slashthedrabble challenge #42 - It Hurts

[darkhavens]

Author: darkhavens
Title: The Safe Word
Pairing: McKay/Sheppard of Stargate Atlantis
Rating: NC-17
Words: 500
Concrit: darkhavens @ slashverse.com
Disclaimer: Not mine, never will be. No harm, no foul, no money made.
Warnings/Squicks: Bondage, a highly effective safe word.
Summary: Rodney can be a very toppy bottom.
Notes: This is my McShep porn cherry being popped. It can only get kinkier. *g*
Beta: Quick and dirty beta performed by kitty_poker1.


The Safe Word

"Oh! Oh, God, that hurts." Rodney moaned and shuddered and John froze in indecision.

"You stopped. Why did you stop? Did I tell you you could stop?" Rodney tried to surge up and back in an effort to drive John deeper, but John had done an expert job of tying him into position, and all he managed was a negligible twitch.

"You said it hurt."

"Yes, yes, and--?" With a sigh, Rodney resigned himself to explaining things again.

"This is the reason we agreed on a safe word before we started. The only time you should ever stop is when you hear that word. Or maybe," he muttered softly, "you've decided to add to your sexual repertoire, because frankly, stopping like that while I'm trussed up like a turkey and this turned on? That truly is the definition of sadism!"

He twitched again and then clenched down hard on John's erection, buried deep - but still not deep enough - inside his body. The rough Athosian blanket chafed his knees and scratched his shoulders, abrading his left cheek and temple as he knelt, unable to move.

"Remember what we chose to be the safe word, John?" He clenched again as John reflexively pulled back. "Remember the way it caused us both to wilt when we tried it out? Until you hear me call that out, keep doing what you're doing. But do it hard, and do it now, John. Fuck me, dammit!"

The harness of knotted ropes, leather straps and military webbing drew John's attention from Rodney's heart-shaped ass to his bound hands, each lashed tightly to a corresponding lushly muscled thigh. He still couldn't quite believe that this was all for him - his toy, his carnal playground, because Rodney said it was.

"Are you still awake back there?"

The snarky though impeccably politely phrased query easily snapped John out of his 'Mine! All mine!' reverie. With a feral grin, John began to move.

Hands trained by combat tightened painfully on pale hips as John held onto Rodney as though he'd never let him go. He lost himself in taking what he wanted, rutting, riding hard. His tongue traced random patterns on salt-sweet skin between the bonds. Rodney tasted like heaven. And chocolate-covered pretzels.

Each furious slam of concave belly against buttocks sent Rodney sliding forward with a whimper, gasp or groan. Skin, hypersensitive from friction, kept his nerve ends singing, a symphony of overblown sensation he wouldn't, couldn't, fight. The pressure in his chest expanded, swelled to swallow him whole, and his limbs began to tremble from the strain.

"Oh God, John, I… I… Oh! Yes!" And then words and thought and meaning were beyond him as he whited out.

* * * * * * *

"So, you really liked that, huh?" John's droll words accompanied Rodney's slow return to consciousness, and he huffed happily in response.

"It's freeing, liberating. I think it feels like flying. You should try it next time."

"Huh. Maybe. But really, Rodney, Kavanagh?"

"It's the most effective safe word I've ever had!"

Comments

[mistressmarilyn.livejournal.com]

Absolute perfection.

I love the concept. I love the writing. I love it all.

[tabaqui]

Heeeeeee.
Ooh, nice.

And, hrmmm, that last little bit is in an utterly differnt text size and font.
Huh.

But! Smut! And good smut!
:)

[mahoy.livejournal.com]

Rodney really couldn't be anything *but* a bossy bottom in my opinion.
Rrrawr! Very nice.

[teza.livejournal.com]

...kavanagh....

Yes, v. effective. XD I heartheartheart BossyBottom!Rodney.

[toniabarone.livejournal.com]

"Huh. Maybe. But really, Rodney, Kavanagh?"

"It's the most effective safe word I've ever had!"

*LOL* As soon as they'd said that even the thought of the safe word wilted them, I KNEW what it was gonna be, but still! Thank you for sharing!

[dragonbetween.livejournal.com]

OMG! That's so great.

"Huh. Maybe. But really, Rodney, Kavanagh?"

"It's the most effective safe word I've ever had!"

And I just got the worst (best?) picture in my head of things going just a little bit to far and Rodney yelling out Kavanagh to get John to stop and Zeleka or someone walking by and thinking Rodney's having sex with Kavanagh, or masturbating to the thought of him, and rumors spreading all over Atlantis about it. (And, ok, it wasn't so much a still picture as a mini-motion picture.)

~ Morgaine

[a-phoenixdragon.livejournal.com]

Loved it! You oughta do slashy McPorn more often! LOL! Loved the safe word - and Rodney was actually quite tame, for Rodney! Excellent dear! Send more!

[literati.livejournal.com]

Great ficlet! Tied-up Rodney is very tasty.

However, promise me you will NEVER mention sex and Kavanagh in the same piece again. I mean it. I'm already with flu and a bloaty head, I don't need the added horror.

::smooch::

[lamardeuse.livejournal.com]

"This is the reason we agreed on a safe word before we started. The only time you should ever stop is when you hear that word. Or maybe," he muttered softly, "you've decided to add to your sexual repertoire, because frankly, stopping like that while I'm trussed up like a turkey and this turned on? That truly is the definition of sadism!"

This is perfect Rodney. And the ending? Bwahahaha! :)

[ex-kyrieane267.livejournal.com]

*worship worship worship*

Fantastic!

[hopeowl.livejournal.com]

LMFAO OMG that was perfect. It nearly made me snort coffee out my nose.

[spikedluv]

LOL Loved Rodney being such a toppy bottom. That was so in-character. And I guessed the safe word had to be Kavanagh, lol!!

[sarren.livejournal.com]

Hee.

Very cool. God, Rodney is hot tied up.

[just-jimbo.livejournal.com]

Well, you know I like the bondage theme. I especially like it well-written like this. And 'Safe Word' is a great title and a great payoff. I don't know the fandom, but I'm sure if I did I'd get the "Kavanagh" bit.

You're a good writer, and your graphic stuff is well done (unlike some fanfic I've read). Yeah, it's a little over-the-top, but that can certainly be forgiven in a setting like this.

His tongue traced random patterns on salt-sweet skin between the bonds. Rodney tasted like heaven. And chocolate-covered pretzels.

Wow. What a description!

(Noticed you disabled comments to the community so people could only comment to your own LJ. Since I do exactly the opposite--linking to the community from my LJ to get other people over there to play--I was surprised by this. I'm assuming you want to capture and control your own comments, but I am curious about the fake cut/disabled comments.)

[lerah99.livejournal.com]

Bwahahahahahaha!!! After this I may make Kavanagh my safe word too. I love this fic. I love where Rodney sighs and starts lecturing John. I love where Jonh thinks "Mine, all Mine"

Thank you so much for posting this. :o)

[alizarin-nyc.livejournal.com]

The snarky though impeccably politely phrased query easily snapped John out of his 'Mine! All mine!' reverie.

What a beautiful sentence.

Great McSmut. Can't wait for more, yes more, more please.

You also have so many good McShep icons - I love them all!

[piratepurple.livejournal.com]

*giggle* That rocked. :)

[http://users.livejournal.com/_beetle_/]

"So, you really liked that, huh?" John's droll words accompanied Rodney's slow return to consciousness, and he huffed happily in response.

"It's freeing, liberating. I think it feels like flying. You should try it next time."

"Huh. Maybe. But really, Rodney, Kavanagh?"

"It's the most effective safe word I've ever had!"

God, I've gotta start watching this show!

[minaloush.livejournal.com]

wow. you should write more smslash with john and rodney...very nice.

[vagablonde.livejournal.com]

Most awesome! LOVED the safe word!