My muse is on crack

She's planted this little taster of a S1 Spander in my head and it won't leave me alone, even though I've typed up everything I've got and I've tried to decide where it's going. And what's worse is she did in the present tense, which always but always trips me up.

So, without further ado, here is ( grungefic )

Suggestions? Critiques? Sanity queries? I'll even accept wild squees of delight if you'll only tell me why, because it's driving me insane.

Grungefic part 2

( Grungefic part 2 )